Some contend that scientific inventions are making us happier whereas others do not agree and assume detrimental side effects of scientific inventions cannot be ignored. Discuss both views and state your idea.
Science today has given us such comforts as were unimaginable years ago. Nowadays, we have electricity, telephones, televisions, washing machines, refrigerators and a host of other gadgets. Some people think all these things have made the life of man both easy and comfortable, yet others disagree and stress that minus points of such inventions are more highlighted.
Scientific innovation’s advocacy group maintains that science-based excogitation has made diverse aspects of our life including travelling not only easy but also efficient. The world has changed to a small village thanks to the internet. People who live in big cities like New York or London have benefited in many ways. For instance, City dwellers have so many entertainments that they do not have any time to spare.
On the destructive side, science has invented weapons whose destructive power is dreadful and disastrous. The invention of Rockets, Atom Bombs, Hydrogen Bombs and other harmful nuclear devices have increased the chances of human destruction up to 70% based on statistics issued by NASA. Thus, if these weapons of science were misused, they would spell disaster for entire mankind. This is the peak of scientific civilization.
I myself am of the opinion that no one can claim whether science is a full blessing or a complete curse. While a scientist makes inventions, a politician misuses them. Mainly, it is this wrong application of scientific inventions by the politician which has brought humanity to a bad state. In this respect science has dehumanized us. Nowadays we have better drugs and surgical instruments, still men are becoming weak and vulnerable constitutionally.
The main conclusion to be drawn from this discussion is that I personally should concede science can be used for happiness but the mad mind of the man and particularly of the politician misusing the discoveries of science makes us unhappy, I wish those early cave dwellers had never managed to invent the wheel.
Analysis
A. Task response:
1. All parts of the given topic have been covered most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.
2. The candidate has stated his own opinion clearly regarding the topic not only in a separate paragraph (the 3rd paragraph) but also in conclusion.
3. The central paragraphs of the essay are well-supported with a range of techniques, (the 1st one with example, the 2nd one with statistics,).
4. This candidate has applied 290 words.
B. Coherence & cohesion:
1. This piece of writing is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive due to the fact that the candidate has applied cohesive devices such as yet, thus, while as well as transitions including on the destructive side . Needless to say, well-supported paragraphs are bound to be cohesive.
C. Grammar:
1. This candidate has used a wide range of structures including conditional, compound/complex structures; more importantly, they are correct which means the candidate has shown an excellent command of English structures by making mistakes in neither basic ones nor advanced ones.
2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation which is a contributing factor in adding to your score.
D. Vocabulary:
1. This candidate has used a wide range of appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance unimaginable, highlight, advocacy, concede, excogitation, dehumanize. …
۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.
Examiner’s final comment:
Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7.5 because of the above-mentioned points.
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