Although some claim that tourism always brings a place more harm than good, others believe its destructive side should not be ignored. Discuss both views and give your idea.
Tourism undoubtedly is one of the world’s fastest-growing industries. People today are travelling further and further, no longer just in the summer but throughout the year. Although some people argue that mass tourism has a couple of negative effects on tourist destinations, in others view its influences are generally positive.
The main positive effect of tourism, based on what proponents say, is on local economy and employment. Tourists need places to stay and recreations to enjoy and this creates a wide range of skilled and unskilled jobs for local people. Holidaymakers also spend a great deal of money, which booms the economy of the region as well as benefiting the country as a whole. The infrastructure of an area is also often improved as a result of tourism. For example, when tourists start visiting an area, roads and public transport tend to improve, or an airport may be built, all of which benefit local people as well as tourists. Another point in favor of tourism is that governments are becoming aware of the need to protect touristy areas in order to attract more visitors. This is leading to better conservation of not only historic building and monuments in towns and cities but also of areas of natural beauty and endangered habitats in suburban areas.
It is often claimed that popular tourist destinations are spoilt as a result of overdevelopment. For instance, many people argue tourism development just leads to a proliferation of ugly hotels and
apartment blocks. The other point against tourism is the detrimental effect which it has on local cultures. Take, as an example, the historic villages around my hometown whose residents have changed for the worse regarding their dressing codes and respecting their own cultural beliefs and customs.
To sum up, I believe that tourism has; on the whole, a positive influence provided its development is properly planned and controlled. In my opinion, it is possible for both tourists and local people to benefit from such development, and for popular tourist destinations to enjoy a sustainable future.
Analysis
A. Task response:
1. This essay has covered all parts of the given topic most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.
2. The candidate has stated his own opinion definitely regarding the topic.
3. The central paragraphs of the essay have been supported with a range of techniques like examples
4. This candidate has applied 300 words, which has exceeded the mentioned standard.
B. Coherence & cohesion:
1. The candidate has managed to express his/her position clearly and successfully because of applying correct & appropriate linkers such as although, and,..
2. This piece of writing is both coherent & cohesive.
C. Grammar:
1. This candidate has used a wide range of structures including passive voice, relative clauses, …; more importantly, they are correct which mean the candidate has shown an excellent command of English structures by making mistakes in neither basic ones nor advanced ones .
2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation.
D. Vocabulary:
1. This candidate has used a wide range of appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance recreation, habitat, monument, infrastructure, proliferation, sustainable, …
۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.
Examiner’s final comment:
Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7+ because of the above-mentioned plus points.
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