• نمونه مقاله آیلتس شماره ۵

     Some suppose museums and art galleries should be free of charge for the general public, yet others claim a charge, even a voluntary charge, should be levied for admittance. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.

     There is no cast of shadow that funding of museums and art galleries is  Top of Form

    One of the unresolved issues in today’s world. While there is an argument that they should be free to the general public and funded by governments, others believe that there is also a case for saying they should charge an entrance fee like other attractions.

    Those who argue that museums should be free, typically make two arguments the first of which is that institutions like museums are a public service; therefore, there should be free access to the man in the street. If for example there was a charge, only the wealthy could afford to enjoy works of art. The second argument is that if they did levy a charge, fewer people would go to museums whose result would be detrimental as they are educational institutions and standards would fall.

    In contrast, there is only one major argument on the other side of the debate that is both museums and art galleries need to charge an entrance fee; otherwise, they will not be able to survive in the modern world. Governments do not have sufficient funds to subsidize all such institutions; besides, there are other priorities for public money. Hence, these galleries and museums need to charge their customers not only to survive but to update their exhibitions and make new purchases. By way of illustration, the Tate Modern in London could not have been founded if it had not been for the revenue from admissions.

     To sum up, there are both pros and cons concerning this issue. Perhaps it is possible for some museums and galleries to charge fees and for others not to. Yet I should concede that plus points of charging an admission outnumber its minus points.

     Analysis

    A. Task response:

    1. The given topic has been covered most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.

    2. The candidate has expressed his own idea definitely concerning the topic not only in a separate paragraph (the 3rd paragraph) but also in conclusion.

    3. The central paragraphs of the essay have been supported with a range of approaches, (the 1st one with example, the 2nd one with example).

    4. This candidate has applied 300 words, which has far exceeded the mentioned standard; consequently, it will be considered a weak point.

    B. Coherence & cohesion:

    1. The candidate has succeeded to express his/her position clearly using correct & appropriate structures besides topic-based lexicon.

    2. This essay is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive since the candidate has applied cohesive devices such as while, therefore, besides as well as transitions including in contrast. Needless to say, well-supported paragraphs are bound to be cohesive.

    C. Grammar:

    1. The candidate has used a different structures including conditional, past modal for, compound/complex structures; more importantly, they have been used correctly.

    2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation.

    D. Vocabulary:

    1. This candidate has used a broad range of appropriate & various words whose collocations are correct, for instance unresolved, priority, concede, outnumber,…

    ۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.

    Examiner’s final comment:

    Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7 because of the above-mentioned points. 

  • نمونه مقاله آیلتس شماره ۴

    In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both views and give your idea.

     

    Nowadays, many children are involved in different types of jobs to have some kind of financial assurance for themselves. Some claim this is good for their development, whereas critics consider it totally useless, so it has remained a controversial issue.

    It is said that children gain valuable experience in the work place. This may be true. However, I would argue that children are mainly employed in jobs that require manual work and are poorly paid. The recent statistics issued by UNICEF revealed the common tasks that 90% of children are assigned to are washing dishes, mopping floors or serving food in restaurants. Meanwhile, these kinds of jobs actually do not provide children with necessary and useful skills to apply in their future career. Take ‘street kids’ in my country as an example whose only way of making money is begging.

    Nevertheless, defenders of child labor argue that it is an effective method of learning. The point is children should be able to apply knowledge taught to them in a real life working environment. Take my father as an example; had it not been because of his childhood apprenticeship, he would never be able to become a dexterous carpenter.

    I myself am of the opinion that childhood work experience helps them to build responsibility in the family. They will understand how difficult it is to earn money and therefore have compassion for their parents. However, it may have a totally adverse effect on children. When children are capable of making money at an early age, their materialistic attitude may make them spend lavishly.

    In conclusion, I think that parents should take appropriate measures to restrict their child from work, for the drawbacks of such a practice outweigh its merits.

     Analysis

    A. Task response:

    1. This essay has covered all parts of the given topic most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.

    2. The candidate has stated his own opinion definitely regarding the topic not only in a separate paragraph (the 3rd paragraph) but also in conclusion.

    3. The central paragraphs of the essay have been supported with a range of techniques, (the 1st one with an example and statistics, the 2nd one with example).

    4. This candidate has applied 300 words, which has far exceeded the mentioned standard; consequently, it will be considered a weak point.

    B. Coherence & cohesion:

    1. This piece of writing is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive due to the fact that the candidate has applied cohesive devices such as however, whereas as well as transitions including nevertheless. Needless to say, well-supported paragraphs are bound to be cohesive.

    C. Grammar:

    1. This candidate has used a wide range of structures including passive voice, compound/complex sentences; more importantly, they are correct.

    2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation which is a contributing factor in adding to your score.

    D. Vocabulary:

    1. This candidate has used a wide range of appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance assurance, controversial, dexterous, apprenticeship…

    ۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.

    Examiner’s final comment:

     Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7.5 because of the above-mentioned points.

  • نمونه مقاله آیلتس شماره۳

    Some people believe that pre-schools and kindergartens should start teaching children basic subjects such as math, writing even computers. Others think that these schools should mainly focus on activities such as games, painting, music, and play.

    Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

     Nowadays, children formally start school around the age of six or seven, yet it is becoming more and more common for children younger than this to attend kindergarten or pre-school. Some parents hope that children in these schools will get a head start on important school subjects such as math and computers, still others simply want their children to have time to play with other pupils and do activities involving creative skills like painting and games.

     On the one hand, it is easy to see why parents might wish their children to start formal learning at an early age. Once children start at primary school, they will be required to start dealing with formal school subjects. If they have had exposure to these subjects while in pre-school, they will undoubtedly have an advantage over others who haven’t. Based on a survey done in the UK 43% of children with this advantage will achieve better grades and success, leading to higher achievement and confidence in their schoolwork.

     However, many parents also realize that children at a young age need time to play and explore their world. Activities involving art and music can develop children’s creativity and playtime can allow children to interact with other children and develop social skills. This is more than just having fun; by doing these activities, children are gaining valuable skills that will help them make friends, enjoy learning and solve problems later on in their school careers. Take my kid brother as an example who took up playing chess when he was 6 and not surprisingly he is a chess master now.

     To sum up, if I were supposed to choose a pre-school for my own child, I would look for a school whose curriculum includes mostly fun activities where children interact and enjoy themselves. This is not to say that formal subjects should not be approached, but they should not take up the majority of the school day and should be introduced in a fun and creative way.

    When it comes to analyzing an essay, naturally we need to focus on the criteria based on which the IELTS examiners assess the piece of writing the most important of which are covering the topic thoroughly, conveying the message clearly, applying correct and varied structures in addition to using a broad range of  words.

     Analysis

    A. Task response:

     ۱٫ This piece of writing has covered all parts of the given topic since the candidate has spent enough time on reading the topic before he/she started to write.

    2. The candidate has stated their own opinion definitely regarding the topic not only in a separate paragraph (the 3rd paragraph) but also in conclusion.

    3. The central paragraphs of the essay are supported with a range of techniques, (the 1st one with statistics, the 2nd one with example).

    Actually the candidate has applied this strategy:    Idea + a little explanation + support. These supports are essential since they contribute to transmitting the message to the reader more effectively & they help us to write unified paragraphs in order not to get off-topic.

      ۴٫ The essay is supposed to be minimum 250 and maximum 280 words professionally speaking. This candidate has applied 315 words, which has far exceeded the mentioned standard; consequently, it will be considered a weak point.

     B. Coherence & cohesion:

     ۱٫ The candidate has managed to express his/her position clearly because of using the correct format (introduction, 3 central paragraphs, conclusion)as well as applying correct & appropriate structures besides topic-based vocabulary.

    2. This essay is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive due to the fact that the candidate has applied cohesive devices such as still as well as transitions including however . Needless to say, well-supported paragraphs are bound to be cohesive. In other words, because candidate has supported his ideas in different paragraphs, all of them are arranged in a logical way.

      C. Grammar:

     ۱٫ This candidate has used a various structures including passive voice, conditional, complex sentences; more importantly, they are correct which means the candidate has shown an excellent command of written English by making mistakes in neither basic ones nor advanced ones.

    2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation which is a contributing factor in adding to your score.

     D. Vocabulary:

     ۱٫ This candidate has used a wide range of appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance exposure, curriculum, interact

    2. There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.

     Examiner’s final comment:

    Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7+ because of the above-mentioned points.

     

     

     

  • نمونه مقاله آیلتس شماره۲

    Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

     Some people contend that mixed ability classes are more beneficial for children’s development than streaming them on the basis of judgment about their academic abilities. However, from others perspective, such approach is discriminatory and should be avoided.

    Admittedly, mixed ability classes provide a better environment for children’s all-round development. In such classes, children with different abilities study together and in turn they can learn from one another. From example, a student, who is good at academic study but weak in dancing or painting, can learn how to dance or paint form his peers. In this sense, mixed ability classes allow students to develop their abilities in different subjects instead of only academic abilities.

    Despite the argument above, advocates of the proposed idea opine streaming students brings more benefits to teachers and students. As for teachers, separating children with better academic abilities from others facilitates effective teaching. This practice helps teachers to control their students more conveniently and easier. Compared with mixed ability classes in which teachers should consider students’ differences when they are using teaching methodologies, streaming makes this situation simpler. To be more specific, students are at the same level of academic ability in a class, and in turn teachers can apply the same methodologies for them all. In this way, the narrower the spread of ability in the class, the more convenient the teaching can be.

    I myself maintain that streaming enables students to learn in an effective way. According to students’ different abilities, they are taught in ways that are more suitable for them. In the top streams, students use more difficult materials; therefore, they can learn more. In sharp contrast, teachers can explain the material more slowly to those in bottom streams. Under this circumstance, students with different academic abilities can study effectively and efficiently.

    Having considered all the above-mentioned facts, this conclusion can be drawn that mixed ability classes are beneficial for students’ versatile development, but in my opinion, segregating students based on different academic ability is better for both teachers and students.

      Analysis

    A. Task response:

    1. This essay has covered all parts of the given topic most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.

    2. The candidate has stated his own opinion definitely regarding the topic not only in a separate paragraph (the 3rd paragraph) but also in conclusion.

    3. The central paragraphs of the essay have been supported with a range of techniques, (the 1st one with example, the 2nd one with comparison).

    4. Your essay is supposed to be minimum 250 and maximum 280 words professionally speaking. This candidate has applied 350 words, which has far exceeded the mentioned standard; consequently, it will be considered a weak point.

    B. Coherence & cohesion:

    1. This piece of writing is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive due to the fact that the candidate has applied cohesive devices such as in contrast, however as well as transitions including admittedly. Needless to say, well-supported paragraphs are bound to be cohesive.

    C. Grammar:

    1. This candidate has used a wide range of structures including adjective clauses, compound/complex structures; more importantly, they are correct which mean the candidate has shown an excellent command of English structures by making mistakes in neither basic ones nor advanced ones.

    2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation which is a contributing factor in adding to your score.

    D. Vocabulary:

    1. This candidate has used appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance perspective, contend, segregate, discriminatory, …

    ۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.

    Examiner’s final comment:

    Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 8 because of the above-mentioned points. 

  • نمونه مقاله آیلتس شماره ۱

    Even though some people think globalization affects the world’s economies in a positive way, there are those who insist that its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss both ideas and state your opinion.

     In the present age, globalization is playing an increasingly important role in our lives. But in the meantime whether it is a blessing or a curse has sparked much debate. Some people argue the globalization has fundamentally beneficial influence on our lives, while many others contend that it has detrimental effect as well.

    Convincing argument can be made that globalization not only plays a pivotal role in the development of technology and economy, but also promotes the exchange of cultures between different countries. To start with, it is the globalization that impels many corporate to become an international group, thereby making contributions to local technology and employment. Specifically, when a multinational group establishes a factory in a developing country, the new equipment, the new management skills and the job vacancies are all in the best interest of local society the result of which, based on statistics issued by a Chicago-based research center, is a 30% reduction in unemployment rate in such areas.

     On the other hand, profit driven globalization severely affected the young people. Today, in metropolises in different countries, it is very common sight that teenagers are wearing        NIKE T-shirt and Adidas footwear, playing Hi-pop music with Apple IPod and having KFC. The culture that took thousand years to form just seems similar in these cities; it looks like you can only distinguish them by their language.

     I myself would concede that globalization do come with both beneficial and adverse effects. People worldwide can get to know each other better through globalization. It is easy to see that more and more Hollywood blockbusters shows the cultures different from American, some recent examples are Kung Fu Panda and Mummy. On the contrary, in some developing countries, sweat workshop is always the issue that has concerned WHO. For instance, based on the recent issued reports 70% of the teenagers who are employed by NIKE’s contractor are forced to work in factories for over 14 hours a day for less than fifty cents per hour.

    In summary, despite the fact that the benefits created by growth in global scale far outweigh the drawbacks, I am convinced that the local government should adopt some drastic measures to overcome the long-term potential disadvantages of this phenomenon.

      

    When it comes to analyzing an essay, naturally we need to focus on the criteria based on which the IELTS examiners assess the piece of writing the most important of which are covering the topic thoroughly, conveying the message clearly, applying correct and varied structures in addition to using a broad range of  words.

    Analysis

     A. Task response:

     ۱٫ This essay has covered all parts of the given topic most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.

    2. The candidate has stated his own opinion definitely regarding the topic not only in a separate paragraph (the 3rd paragraph) but also in conclusion.

    3. The central paragraphs of the essay have been supported with a range of techniques, (the 1st one with statistics, the 2nd one with example, the 3rd one with both).

    Actually the candidate has applied this strategy:    Idea + a little explanation + support. These supports are essential since they contribute to transmitting the message to the reader more effectively & they help us to write unified paragraphs in order not to get off-topic.

    4. Your essay is supposed to be minimum 250 and maximum 280 words professionally speaking. This candidate has applied 400 words, which has far exceeded the mentioned standard; consequently, it will be considered a weak point.

     B. Coherence & cohesion:

     ۱٫ The candidate has managed to express his/her position clearly and successfully because of using the correct format (introduction, 3 central paragraphs, conclusion)as well as applying correct & appropriate structures besides topic-based vocabulary.

    2. This piece of writing is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive due to the fact that the candidate has applied cohesive devices such as while, despite the fact that, on the contrary as well as transitions including on the other hand. Needless to say, well-supported paragraphs are bound to be cohesive. In other words, because candidate has supported his ideas in different paragraphs, all of them are arranged in a logical way.

    C. Grammar:

     ۱٫ This candidate has used a wide range of structures including relative clauses, compound and complex sentences; more importantly, they are correct which mean the candidate has shown an excellent command of English structures by making mistakes in neither basic ones nor advanced ones.

    2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation which is a contributing factor in adding to the score.

     D. Vocabulary:

     ۱٫ This candidate has used a wide range of appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance curse, spark, detrimental, impel,…

    ۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.

     Examiner’s final comment:

     Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 8 because of the above-mentioned plus points.

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

  • مقالات آیلتس همراه با تحلیل

    Animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings, unless there is evidence that the animals do not suffer in any way.
    To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

    There is a lot of controversy about using animals for human needs. Animal rights activists are trying to stop all modern and traditional activities, which involve killing animals or cause their suffering. Traditionalists are trying to convince the community that using living creatures for men’s needs is natural and cannot be avoided in everyday life.

    Activists, who defend animal rights, are telling the world that people should not use animals in any way. Moreover, they say that animals should have exactly the same rights as humans do. The reason is that people and animals are both living creatures and there shouldn’t be any difference in treating them. So called extreme vegans are refusing to eat any food of animal origin, even milk or honey. They are trying to persuade people to do the same using as an argument that killing animals and keeping them in captivity cause their suffering and not civilized.

    Traditionalists disagree with the statement that human should stop killing animals or using them to fulfill their needs. From the very beginning of human civilization there has been a tradition and vital need to use animals as a food and their parts in traditional crafts. Without proteins and vitamins of animal origin human body wouldn’t receive all nutrients it needs. Besides, testing some medicines on animals already helped to fight many diseases people suffered from.

    I think, people have the moral right to use animals to their benefit, to some extent. I am sure, we should not make them suffer and die for our fun. Although using animals for food is natural for humans as predators, as civilized city dwellers we should make sure to use only humane ways of treating them.

     تحلیل مقاله

    Task response

    the essay is not off-topic

    the writer has stated his opinion concerning the given topic

    the central paragraphs are well-supported

    the writer has applied minimum 250 words

    Coherence and cohesion

    the message is clear

    the writer has applied linking words, cohesive devices, pronouns and transitions appropriately

    Vocabulary

    The writer has used a range of related words to the topic with appropriate collocations

    Grammar

    The writer has used a wide range of structure correctly

    Band Score: 7.5

  • مقالات آیلتس

    In recent years, people watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this? Should the government give financial support to local cinema to produce local films?

    It is unquestionably the case that there is a growing trend for people to watch foreign films in preference to films made in their home country. In this essay, I will discuss why this is the case and why I believe national governments ought to support home grown cinema financially.

    Perhaps the principal reason for the popularity of foreign made films is the globalization of culture in the internet age. In the past, children growing up only had access to the culture and traditions of their own country and so preferred to watch films about their own land. Now in the era of YouTube, young people grow up with easy access to an international culture; as a result, when they go to the cinema, they expect to see films that reflect that international culture and for them a Hollywood blockbuster is much “cooler” than a serious film in their own language.

    A second reason why internationally produced films tend to dominate the domestic market is financial. The two great centers of world cinema, Bollywood and Hollywood, have studios with budgets of billions of dollars which can make films with exciting special effects and high production values. In contrast, locally produced films which often have much smaller budgets are therefore less attractive to the mass market.

    Personally, I believe that this globalization of culture is not entirely positive and governments should take action to promote local films. If countries had their own film industries which could compete with the international studios, this would not only help preserve national culture, but also create more choices for the public as global films offer little variety.

    In conclusion, the main reasons for the expansion of international films are a new globalized world culture caused by the internet and the financial power of a few film studios in Hollywood and Bollywood. We would have more choices if the governments subsidized local films.

    تحلیل مقاله

    Task response

    the essay is not off-topic

    the writer has stated his opinion concerning the given topic

    the central paragraphs are well-supported

    the writer has applied minimum 250 words

    Coherence and cohesion

    the message is clear

    the writer has applied linking words, cohesive devices, pronouns and transitions appropriately

    Grammar

    The writer has used a range of related words to the topic with appropriate collocations

    Vocabulary

    The writer has used a wide range of structures correctly

                                                                                                                                                Band Score: 7.5

  • مقالات آیلتس

    In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    Nowadays, many children involved in different types of jobs to have some kind of financial assurance for themselves. However, whether this is good for their development and personality is a controversial issue. I personally believe that paid works is harmful for children for several reasons.

    It is said that children gain valuable experience in the work place. This may be true. However, I would argue that children are mainly employed in jobs that require manual work and are poorly paid. The recent statistics reveal the common tasks that children are assigned to, are washing dishes, mopping floors or serving food in restaurants. Meanwhile, these kinds of jobs actually do not provide children with necessary and useful skills to apply in their future carrier.

    On the other hand defenders of child labour argues that it is an effective method of learning. The point is children should be able to apply knowledge taught to them in a real life working environment. Although this is undoubtedly true, it also means that children may neglect the classroom study and even fail the class. The worst thing is yet to come. They may become so preoccupied with the benefits ahead of them such as small salary that they may leave school.

    In my personal point of view it helps them to build responsibility in the family. They will understand how difficult it is to earn money and therefore have compassion for their parents. This is true to a certain extent, but may have a totally adverse effect on children. As children can make money at an early age, they would feel that it is appropriate to spend it on luxury things.

    In conclusion, I think that parents should take measures to restrict their child from work, otherwise it would have negative consequences to their future.

    تحلیل مقاله

    Task response

    the essay is not off-topic

    the writer has stated his opinion concerning the given topic

    the central paragraphs are well-supported

    the writer has applied minimum 250 words

    Coherence and cohesion

    the message is clear

    the writer has applied linking words, cohesive devices, pronouns and transitions appropriately

    Grammar

    The writer has used a range of related words to the topic with appropriate collocations

    Vocabulary

    The writer has used a wide range of structures correctly

     Band Score : 7.5

  • بهترین روش برای تحت تاثیر قراردادن ممتحن آیلتس در آزمون Speaking

    بهترین روش برای تحت تاثیر قراردادن ممتحن آیلتس در آزمون  Speaking  چیست؟
    روشهای متعددی به منظور تحت تاثیر قراردادن ممتحن آیلتس در آزمون  Speaking  پیشنهاد شده است، مثلا در مورد آقایان پوشیدن لباس رسمی همراه با کراوات و در مورد خانمها پوشش آراسته همراه با آرایش البته در حد و اندازه معقول. شخصا استراتژی های ذکر شده را موثر می دانم هرچند که روش ساده تر و در عین حال تاثیرگذارتری نیز وجود دارد که آنهم چیزی نیست به جز ” لبخند زدن ” در طول ۱۲ تا ۱۴ دقیقه ای که ممتحن در حال مصاحبه با شماست. اگر دقت کرده باشید در حالت عادی هم لذت صحبت کردن با افرادی که لبخند بر لب دارند به مراتب بیشتر از افراد عبوس و عصبی است و بدون شک زمانیکه پای آزمون در میان است چنین راهکاری معجزه آسا خواهد بود.

  • ارتقا نمره Speaking در آزمون آیلتس

    بهترین روش به منظور ارتقا نمره  Speaking در آزمون آیلتس چیست؟
    مطمئنا یکی از بهترین روشهای ارتقا نمره  Speaking  صحبت کردن با شخصی است که تسلط بیشتری نسبت به شما داشته باشد تا بتواند در صورت نیاز شما را تصحیح کند اما از آنجا که دسترسی به چنین شخصی کار ساده ای نخواهد بود توصیه من ضبط کردن صدای خودتان به عنوان بهترین روش در این زمینه است. از خودتان سئوال بپرسید و همزمان صدایتان را ضبط کرده ، سپس خوب به آن گوش دهید. با تکرار این روش قادر خواهید بود تا بسیاری از ضعفهای خود را پوشش داده و در زمانی کوتاه قدمی موثر بردارید. این تکنیک را نه تنها من بلکه بیشتر کسانی که بدون دسترسی به شخصی که بتواند آنها را تصحیح کند به موفقیت در Speaking  رسیده اند پیشنهاد می کنند. این روش را حتما امتحان کنید.