Some contend that scientific inventions are making us happier whereas others do not agree and assume detrimental side effects of scientific inventions cannot be ignored. Discuss both views and state your idea.

 Science today has given us such comforts as were unimaginable years ago. Nowadays, we have electricity, telephones, televisions, washing machines, refrigerators and a host of other gadgets. Some people think all these things have made the life of man both easy and comfortable, yet others disagree and stress that minus points of such inventions are more highlighted. 

Scientific innovation’s advocacy group maintains that science-based excogitation has made diverse aspects of our life including travelling not only easy but also efficient. The world has changed to a small village thanks to the internet. People who live in big cities like New York or London have benefited in many ways. For instance, City dwellers have so many entertainments that they do not have any time to spare.

On the destructive side, science has invented weapons whose destructive power is dreadful and disastrous. The invention of Rockets, Atom Bombs, Hydrogen Bombs and other harmful nuclear devices have increased the chances of human destruction up to 70% based on statistics issued by NASA. Thus, if these weapons of science were misused, they would spell disaster for entire mankind. This is the peak of scientific civilization.

I myself am of the opinion that no one can claim whether science is a full blessing or a complete curse. While a scientist makes inventions, a politician misuses them. Mainly, it is this wrong application of scientific inventions by the politician which has brought humanity to a bad state. In this respect science has dehumanized us. Nowadays we have better drugs and surgical instruments, still men are becoming weak and vulnerable constitutionally.

The main conclusion to be drawn from this discussion is that I personally should concede science can be used for happiness but the mad mind of the man and particularly of the politician misusing the discoveries of science makes us unhappy, I wish those early cave dwellers had never managed to invent the wheel.

 Analysis

 A. Task response:

1. All parts of the given topic have been covered most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.

2. The candidate has stated his own opinion clearly regarding the topic not only in a separate paragraph (the 3^rd paragraph) but also in conclusion.

3. The central paragraphs of the essay are well-supported with a range of techniques, (the 1^st one with example, the 2^nd one with statistics,).

4. This candidate has applied 290 words.

B. Coherence & cohesion:

1. This piece of writing is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive due to the fact that the candidate has applied cohesive devices such as yet, thus, while as well as transitions including on the destructive side . Needless to say, well-supported paragraphs are bound to be cohesive.

C. Grammar:

1. This candidate has used a wide range of structures including conditional, compound/complex structures; more importantly, they are correct which means the candidate has shown an excellent command of English structures by making mistakes in neither basic ones nor advanced ones.

2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation which is a contributing factor in adding to your score.

D. Vocabulary:

1. This candidate has used a wide range of appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance unimaginable, highlight, advocacy, concede, excogitation, dehumanize. …

۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.

Examiner’s final comment:

Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7.5 because of the above-mentioned points.

 Some suppose museums and art galleries should be free of charge for the general public, yet others claim a charge, even a voluntary charge, should be levied for admittance. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.

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One of the unresolved issues in today’s world. While there is an argument that they should be free to the general public and funded by governments, others believe that there is also a case for saying they should charge an entrance fee like other attractions.

Those who argue that museums should be free, typically make two arguments the first of which is that institutions like museums are a public service; therefore, there should be free access to the man in the street. If for example there was a charge, only the wealthy could afford to enjoy works of art. The second argument is that if they did levy a charge, fewer people would go to museums whose result would be detrimental as they are educational institutions and standards would fall.

In contrast, there is only one major argument on the other side of the debate that is both museums and art galleries need to charge an entrance fee; otherwise, they will not be able to survive in the modern world. Governments do not have sufficient funds to subsidize all such institutions; besides, there are other priorities for public money. Hence, these galleries and museums need to charge their customers not only to survive but to update their exhibitions and make new purchases. By way of illustration, the Tate Modern in London could not have been founded if it had not been for the revenue from admissions.

 To sum up, there are both pros and cons concerning this issue. Perhaps it is possible for some museums and galleries to charge fees and for others not to. Yet I should concede that plus points of charging an admission outnumber its minus points.

 Analysis

A. Task response:

1. The given topic has been covered most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.

2. The candidate has expressed his own idea definitely concerning the topic not only in a separate paragraph (the 3^rd paragraph) but also in conclusion.

3. The central paragraphs of the essay have been supported with a range of approaches, (the 1^st one with example, the 2^nd one with example).

4. This candidate has applied 300 words, which has far exceeded the mentioned standard; consequently, it will be considered a weak point.

B. Coherence & cohesion:

1. The candidate has succeeded to express his/her position clearly using correct & appropriate structures besides topic-based lexicon.

2. This essay is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive since the candidate has applied cohesive devices such as while, therefore, besides as well as transitions including in contrast. Needless to say, well-supported paragraphs are bound to be cohesive.

C. Grammar:

1. The candidate has used a different structures including conditional, past modal for, compound/complex structures; more importantly, they have been used correctly.

2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation.

D. Vocabulary:

1. This candidate has used a broad range of appropriate & various words whose collocations are correct, for instance unresolved, priority, concede, outnumber,…

۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.

Examiner’s final comment:

Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7 because of the above-mentioned points. 

In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both views and give your idea.

Nowadays, many children are involved in different types of jobs to have some kind of financial assurance for themselves. Some claim this is good for their development, whereas critics consider it totally useless, so it has remained a controversial issue.

It is said that children gain valuable experience in the work place. This may be true. However, I would argue that children are mainly employed in jobs that require manual work and are poorly paid. The recent statistics issued by UNICEF revealed the common tasks that 90% of children are assigned to are washing dishes, mopping floors or serving food in restaurants. Meanwhile, these kinds of jobs actually do not provide children with necessary and useful skills to apply in their future career. Take ‘street kids’ in my country as an example whose only way of making money is begging.

Nevertheless, defenders of child labor argue that it is an effective method of learning. The point is children should be able to apply knowledge taught to them in a real life working environment. Take my father as an example; had it not been because of his childhood apprenticeship, he would never be able to become a dexterous carpenter.

I myself am of the opinion that childhood work experience helps them to build responsibility in the family. They will understand how difficult it is to earn money and therefore have compassion for their parents. However, it may have a totally adverse effect on children. When children are capable of making money at an early age, their materialistic attitude may make them spend lavishly.

In conclusion, I think that parents should take appropriate measures to restrict their child from work, for the drawbacks of such a practice outweigh its merits.

 Analysis

A. Task response:

1. This essay has covered all parts of the given topic most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.

2. The candidate has stated his own opinion definitely regarding the topic not only in a separate paragraph (the 3^rd paragraph) but also in conclusion.

3. The central paragraphs of the essay have been supported with a range of techniques, (the 1^st one with an example and statistics, the 2^nd one with example).

4. This candidate has applied 300 words, which has far exceeded the mentioned standard; consequently, it will be considered a weak point.

B. Coherence & cohesion:

1. This piece of writing is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive due to the fact that the candidate has applied cohesive devices such as however, whereas as well as transitions including nevertheless. Needless to say, well-supported paragraphs are bound to be cohesive.

C. Grammar:

1. This candidate has used a wide range of structures including passive voice, compound/complex sentences; more importantly, they are correct.

2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation which is a contributing factor in adding to your score.

D. Vocabulary:

1. This candidate has used a wide range of appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance assurance, controversial, dexterous, apprenticeship…

۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.

Examiner’s final comment:

 Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7.5 because of the above-mentioned points.