• Writing IELTS: buildings should be built in a way that serves their purpose OR represent art

    آذر ۲۶, ۱۳۹۶ نام: حمید ملازاده

    Writing IELTS
    Some believe buildings should be built in a way that serves their purpose rather than just look beautiful. Others, however, say buildings should represent art too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

    IELTS Band 8.5 Essay

    Constructing buildings is a complex process that needs to cater to the primary purpose of the construction as well as the requirement of looking distinguished. While some buildings successfully integrate both, some however are inclined towards only one of the two factors. This essay shall discuss the relevant conditions for constructing a building.

    There are a lot of examples in the world regarding buildings that are artistically rich as well as sturdy in their construction. The Florence Cathedral in Italy, the Taj Mahal in India, the palace of Westminster in England are renowned examples of cultural symbols and works of art in the field of architecture, along with being sufficiently equipped to serve the primary cause of their establishment. These buildings are many decades old but are still standing strong and for this reason they are famous worldwide. Therefore we can say that building any structure with both purpose and art is not rare.

    On the contrary, the world has also seen many architectural disasters that were caused due to poor planning and construction, even though they were intended to be assembly of artwork. A near-accurate guess can be that the architects put so much emphasis on the appearance of the building that they neglected the other important features that need to be well thought-out as well. The Leaning Tower of Pisa is a stark example of how the foundations of the building weren’t paid adequate attention, resulting that the building couldn’t hold up its own weight.  Many such buildings have suffered collapses due to serious miscalculations in the architectural planning. These illustrations make us wonder whether appearance should totally be sidelined for structural stability of any building.

    In my view, I feel a building should be a combination of style and stability. The primary purpose of a building and the appearance both should be kept in mind while planning and equal weight age should be given to both.

    (318 words)

  • Writing IELTS: When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out.

    آذر ۲۱, ۱۳۹۶ نام: حمید ملازاده

    Writing IELTS

    When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.

     To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

    Nowadays, technological advances and their rapid and wide applications are having a significant impact on a nation’s traditional skills and ways of life. Some argue that such impact is so extraordinary that it would make conventional skills and life styles obsolete. However, I believe they would continue to thrive by providing alternatives to modern ways of life, and innovative ideas for modern technologies.

    First of all, traditional skills and ways of life are becoming an alternative solution to the problems caused by “mainstreamed” ways of life which are greatly influenced by modern technologies. For instance, a cozy restaurant where traditional, home-brewed beer is served, offers another experience to people who are bored with branded beers that have the same flavor and come out of mass production with new technologies. It is in such a venue where traditional skills are preserved, people become relaxed and educated. Providing diversity and thus enriching modern ways of life, such traditional skills and ways of life would continue to have their place.

    Furthermore, conventional skills provide innovative ideas to the development of modern technologies. For example, sparkled by how the word “Love” is traditionally knitted into a sweater by some ethnic minority women in some parts of Asia, some business managers from textile industry have developed some production lines by applying the traditional skills to Computer-Aided Designs (CAD). The products have boosted the companies’ sales which in turn have increased their investment in preserving traditional skills for further developing their technologies.

    To conclude, traditional skills and life styles are increasingly becoming a useful alternative to the homogeneity brought by global applications of modern technologies. However, the evolution of technologies is a selection process, whereby some would become obsolete, but there is no doubt that some would thrive when their roles are appreciated.

  • IELTS Writing: Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?

    آذر ۱۹, ۱۳۹۶ نام: حمید ملازاده

    IELTS Writing:
    Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?

    Most foods that are purchased these days in small stores and supermarkets have chemicals in them as these are used to improve production and ensure the food lasts for longer. However, there are concerns that these have harmful effects.  In my opinion, the potential dangers from this are greater than the benefits we receive.

    There are several reasons why chemicals are placed in food. Firstly, it is to improve the product to the eye, and this is achieved via the use of colourings which encourage people to purchase food that may otherwise not look tempting to eat. Another reason is to preserve the food. Much of the food we eat would not actually last that long if it were not for chemicals they contain, so again this is an advantage to the companies that sell food as their products have a longer shelf life.

    From this evidence, it is clear to me that the main benefits are, therefore, to the companies and not to the customer. Although companies claim these food additives are safe and they have research to support this, the research is quite possibly biased as it comes from their own companies or people with connections to these companies. It is common to read reports these days in the press about possible links to various health issues such as cancer. Food additives have also been linked to problems such as hyperactivity in children.

    To conclude, despite the fact that there are benefits to placing chemicals in food, I believe that these principally help the companies but could be a danger to the public. It is unlikely that this practice can be stopped, so food must be clearly labeled and it is my hope that organic products will become more readily available at reasonable prices to all.

     

  • IELTS Letter Writing: Your-have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You naive find that you cannot continue the course.

    آذر ۱۸, ۱۳۹۶ نام: حمید ملازاده

    IELTS Letter Writing:

    You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

    Your-have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You naive find that you cannot continue the course.

    Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter

           describe the situation

           explain why you cannot continue at this time

           say what action you would like to take

    Write at least 150 words.

    You do NOT need to write any addresses.

    Begin your letter as follows:

    Dear …………….. ,

    model answer:

    Dear Sir or Madam,

    My name is Muhamad Abdul. I am taking a part-time evening course. I am having a hard time keeping up with this course. I am afraid I cannot continue the course.
    My problem is, I have a full-time job, from 9am – ۵pm. Sometimes, I am asked to stay extra hours, to finish up the rest of the work. That is because the holidays are coming up soon. Also I have to do some work preparations for the next day.

    At night when I get home, I am too tired to even prepare a dinner for myself. Also I have no time to study for this course.
    I would like drop this course this quarter. Then take it again the next quarter. So, please accept my situation.

    Thank you for your cooperation

    Sincerely

    M. Abdul

    (135 words)

  • Writing IELTS: animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines

    آبان ۳۰, ۱۳۹۶ نام: حمید ملازاده

    Writing IELTS:  animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines

    Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity.

    Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

    It is true that medicines and other products are routinely tested on animals before they are cleared for human use. While I tend towards the viewpoint that animal testing is morally wrong, I would have to support a limited amount of animal experimentation for the development of medicines.

    On the one hand, opponents of animal testing opine that there are clear ethical arguments against animal experimentation. To use a common example of this practice, laboratory mice may be given an illness so that the effectiveness of a new drug can be measured. Opponents of such research argue that humans have no right to subject animals to this kind of trauma, and that the lives of all creatures should be respected. They believe that the benefits to humans do not justify the suffering caused, and that scientists should use alternative methods of research.

    On the other hand, supporters of the use of animals in medical research believe that a certain amount of suffering on the part of mice or rats can be justified if human lives are saved. To put it simply, reliable alternatives to animal experimentation may not always be available, so this issue may be a necessary evil where new drugs and medical procedures are concerned. They argue that opponents of such research might feel differently if a member of their own families needed a medical treatment that had been developed through the use of animal experimentation.

    To sum up, I personally agree with the banning of animal testing for non-medical products except for vital medical research until equally effective alternatives have been developed.

  • Writing IELTS: The football World Cup and other international sporting occasions

    آبان ۲۸, ۱۳۹۶ نام: حمید ملازاده

    Writing IELTS: The football World Cup and other international sporting occasions

    Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

    Every four years, the whole world stops to watch international sporting events such as the Olympics and the Football World Cup in which athletes show their best performance to make their country proud of them. These sporting occasions have proved to be helpful in easing international tensions in difficult times when powerful leaders were trying to control the world?s economy and other governments were fighting over land.

    The Olympic Games are one of the best examples which prove how sporting events can bring nations together, at least temporarily. From ancient History, when Greeks and Romans would interrupt battles to participate in the games, to the more recent international disputes, when athletes from Palestine and Israel would forget their differences, compete pacifically and even embrace each other after an event. Moreover, these popular events have called the world?s attention to the terrible consequences of wars; thus some leaders have tried to accept agreements to end their dispute and live peacefully.

    Similarly, international sporting events show benefits in some developing countries which live in a daily internal civil war. For example, Brazil has a high rate of unemployment, lack of education, hunger, crime, poverty and corruption which leads to an immense embarrassment of being Brazilian and a low self-esteem. However, when the Football World Cup starts, the Brazilian squad, which is considered the best team in the world, provokes an amazing feeling of pride in their country. Most people seem to forget all their problems and even the criminal activity decreases. They paint roads with the national colors, use wear the Brazilian team shirt and buy national flags. Moreover, the competition brings families and neighbors together and even rival gangs watch the games and celebrate peacefully.

    In conclusion, popular sporting events play an important role in decreasing international tensions and liberating patriotic feelings as History has shown.

    This is a great essay, the ideas, language, structure of paragraphs and sentences, grammar show high level of English. In my opinion it is Band 8. Keep up the good work.

  • Writing IELTS Task 2: Why criminal acts are committed by teenagers?

    آبان ۲۶, ۱۳۹۶ نام: حمید ملازاده

    Writing IELTS Task 2:
    In some countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?

     

    Today, youth crime is rife. Theft, burglary or even murder are now committed by people of younger and younger ages. The aim of this essay is to investigate the factors responsible for the increase in juvenile delinquency and put forward a number of ways to appropriately punish young offenders.

    It is observed that extreme behaviours are exhibited by most children from dysfunctional families. Without the supervision from parents or caregivers, children’s extreme behaviours such as aggression, hostility or defiance are given free rein to develop in their later lives. In addition, there is a direct correlation between the lack of engagement in educational activities and serious criminal offending in children. Out of boredom, children befriend with antisocial peers and will gradually copy their behaviours. Media also plays an enormous role in shaping children’s criminality. For example, games such as grand theft auto can desensitise younger players to extreme acts of violence and cruelty, encourage them to commit crimes while giving them the impression that it is morally acceptable to do so.

    Imprisonment is often cited as a way to punish juvenile offenders. However, it is my view that this approach can produce extremely destructive effects. The youth can potentially be victims of physical or sexual abuse from older prisoners, as well as can adopt their negative behaviours. I feel that the better cure for young criminals is rehabilitation. Throughout education and training, the youth can realise their wrongful actions and be given opportunities to turn over a new leaf and transform themselves into useful members of society later in life.

    There are reasons to explain why today antisocial behaviour among the youth nowadays has reached a historically unprecedented high and rehabilitation is the answer for this. 

  • Writing IELTS Task 2 (educating criminals in prison)

    آبان ۱۶, ۱۳۹۶ نام: حمید ملازاده

    Writing IELTS Task 2


    Studies show that criminals get low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce the crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

     

    Education for offenders during imprisonment as a method to reduce the rate of crime has evolved as a major topic of concern in today’s society. While I agree that such a solution is effective to reduce crime, I am convinced that it is far from being the best method and there are many better ways of reducing crime.

    I accept that education for prisoners may contribute to the reduction of the crime rate. The primary reason is that such a form of education could provide offenders with the working skills that are essential when they return to the community. With fortified job prospects, prisoners may therefore earn a living after leaving the prison and are less likely to commit a crime again. Another significant reason is that education could show the offenders that they are still appreciated by society. By this way, they may feel an enhanced sense of humanity and community, and become better citizens after their prison years. These people may then inspire many others in the public to live without crime.

    However, I am firmly of the opinion that education for offenders is not the best solution to reduce crime. This form of education is offered only to those who have committed a crime, and therefore has far less preventive value, compared to other stronger solutions. For example, severe punishments such as longer imprisonment for criminals could deter criminal acts by many people in the public who have the intention to carry out a crime. There are also other educational methods that may have a stronger and more long-lasting impact on the reduction of crime. An excellent example of this is crime education at school, which helps equip students with the necessary knowledge about crime and crime prevention. This measure is undeniably a more sustainable crime-fighting solution than education for criminals.

    To conclude, I firmly believe that although educating prisoners is an effective way to reduce crime, it is not the best solution, as there are more preventive and sustainable measures such as crime education at school and stricter punishments for criminals.

  • writing sample task 2 (Balanced approach)

    خرداد ۲۰, ۱۳۹۶ نام: حمید ملازاده

     writing sample task 2 (Balanced approach)

    Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

     

    There is no cast of shadow that environment-attributed challenges are such big menaces to the whole world, yet the question is whether they ought to be tackled individually or internationally. Although each and every one of us can play a key role to address the issue, global institutions can and should perform a much more crucial duty in this regard.

    As far as individuals are concerned, they should acknowledge the fact that “our planet is our home”, to be more specific regardless of what administrations can do to resolve the matter, the dwellers of every single city and town ought to be required to comply with environmentally-friendly standards in their life one of which is relying on public transportation to commute to curb emission of green house gases as a major source of air pollution. Take Scandinavian states as a case in point where a large proportion of residents either walk or take their bikes both to wander around and go to work. Moreover, these people show no interest in utilizing fossil fuels to keep their houses warm and they have already started to install solar panels on their rooftops to harness solar “green” energy.

    Naturally enough, international organizations namely the United Nations as well as the International Monetary Fund are able to have a much more prominent role via holding global conventions and summits in which representatives of different states participate to express their concerns and coordinate their efforts with other officials and executives bodies, which are definitely prosperous enough to afford exorbitant expenses of conducting universal environmental campaigns. For instance, had it not been for the climate conference in Paris in 2015, none of those 170 states would initiate their anti-global warming schemes whose positive results will be shown in long-run.

    Having considered all the above-mentioned facts, I personally concede not only the public but also the global community must be obliged to take responsibilities to fight against constant environmental threats.

     

    Word count: 360

    Time: 45′

    Hamid Mollazadeh

  • نمونه مقاله آیلتس شماره ۲۸

    آبان ۲۳, ۱۳۹۴ نام: حمید ملازاده

    نمونه مقاله آیلتس شماره ۲۸

    Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

     The World Cup football match and the Olympics are held worldwide with great national support and expectations. Fans of those competitions support the idea that sporting events can be necessary for international relations and national unity, yet others believe downsides of such events cannot be ignored.

    From proponents’ perspective, the main advantage associated with the World Cup, Olympics and other international games is easing tensions among different nations. For example, South and North Korea have football games regularly which give two nations a chance to understand each other deeply. In fact, in the mid-1990s, hundreds of North Korean supporters came to South Korea with the footballers and they were very excited during the sporting events. Even if it sounds ridiculous, many South Koreans were quite surprised at that moment when North Koreans shouted and cried during the match. We all realized that they were very normal sports fans even though they were occasionally very secretive. Through the sports, two divided nations could reduce their political and ideological tensions and could feel the patriotic unity.

    On the other hand, critics of the above-mentioned idea concede sports matches can make international relations worse. For instance, football or baseball games between Korea and Japan are always big matches in two countries in which tensions overflow. Sometimes, after the matches, the two rivals blame each other and their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way. Even much worse scenario is the troubles caused by losing games that affect the players directly. As far as I know, a couple of Korean players in Japan suffered from invisible discrimination after the match between two countries.

    In conclusion, I think that global sporting occasions can be one of the surest strategies to relieve tensions or to release patriotism safely.

     Analysis

    A. Task response:

    1. This essay has covered all parts of the given topic most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.

    2. The candidate has stated his own opinion definitely regarding the topic.

    3. The central paragraphs of the essay have been supported with a range of techniques like examples

    4. This candidate has applied 280 words, which seems to be professional.

    B. Coherence & cohesion:

    1. The candidate has managed to express his/her position clearly and successfully because of applying correct & appropriate linkers like yet, if, …

    ۲٫ This piece of writing is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive.

    C. Grammar:

    1. This candidate has used a wide range of structures including conditional, complex sentences, …; more importantly, they are correct which mean the candidate has shown an excellent command of English structures by making mistakes in neither basic nor advanced ones .

    2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation.

    D. Vocabulary:

    1. This candidate has used a wide range of appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance associate, invisible, tension, critic, patriotism, …

    ۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.

    Examiner’s final comment:

    Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7+ because of the above-mentioned plus points. 

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