Nowadays, litter and rubbish on the street and sidewalks is becoming a problem. Some people feel that the best way to solve this problem is to fine people who throw rubbish on the floor. Do you think this would be effective? What other methods could be used to solve the problem of litter?
Many people may feel that littering is not a big problem in today’s world, but too much litter and rubbish on the street and sidewalk will make an area less attractive. People who litter are in some way showing that they do not care what their neighborhood looks like and that they do not feel a sense of pride in their area. If an area has too much litter, it is very probable that the number of pests like rats rise markedly. It is clearly a good idea to encourage people not to throw rubbish on the ground.
Some people suppose that fining people is the most effective strategy to urge them not to leave waste paper, cans etc. on the ground in a public place. The idea is that if someone is caught littering by the police, they will have to pay a certain amount of money as a punishment. This would certainly discourage that person from scattering litter again. However, there are not enough police to monitor all areas of a city, and there are more important issues for the police to deal with. If only a handful of people get fined, then only a handful of people will stop littering.
There are some other methods that could be applied in addition to giving fines in order to encourage people to stop leaving their rubbish in public places. Firstly, the city should put up more rubbish bins. If there is a garbage bin on every street or every corner, people will have a place to put their trash. Posters and television ads could also highlight the problem and show people why littering should be stopped. For instance, in my country officials have started to set a culture via broadcasting educational cartoons for school kids concerning plastic pollution that is a matter of concern these days.
In conclusion, what I recommend is employing more people to sweep or clean the sidewalks and streets in the places where many people walk every day. Once people get used to having rubbish-free streets and sidewalks, they will start to notice litter more and accept it less.
Analysis
A. Task response:
1. This essay has covered all parts of the given topic most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.
2. The candidate has stated his own opinion definitely regarding the topic.
3. The central paragraphs of the essay have been supported with a range of techniques like examples
4. This candidate has applied 370 words, which has far exceeded the mentioned standard
B. Coherence & cohesion:
1. The candidate has managed to express his/her position clearly and successfully because of applying correct & appropriate linkers like if, however, but, …
۲٫ This piece of writing is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive.
C. Grammar:
1. This candidate has used a wide range of structures including conditional, compound sentences, …; more importantly, they are correct which mean the candidate has shown an excellent command of English structures by making mistakes in neither basic ones nor advanced ones .
2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation.
D. Vocabulary:
1. This candidate has used a wide range of appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance scatter, highlight, litter, broadcast, handful, …
۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.
Examiner’s final comment:
Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7 because of the above-mentioned plus points.
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