Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?
The fact that humans are responsible for a variety of environmental problems is undeniable, but we ought to take steps to reduce the damage that we are causing to the planet. Two of the biggest threats to the environment are air pollution and waste. Gas emissions from factories and exhaust fumes from vehicles lead to global warming, which may have a devastating effect on the planet in the future. As the human population increases, we are also producing ever greater quantities of rubbish, which contaminates the earth and pollutes rivers and oceans.
Governments are certainly capable of making more contribution to reduce air pollution. They can introduce laws to limit emissions from factories or to force companies to use renewable energy from solar, wind or water power. They could also impose ‘green taxes’ on drivers and airline companies to erase their carbon foot print. In this way, people would be encouraged to use public transport more and to take fewer flights abroad, therefore reducing emissions whose result would be a cleaner environment.
Individuals should also take responsibility for the impact they have on the environment. They can carpool rather than taking their cars to their workplace every day. Take my friend and I as an example, although we have our own cars, we give each other a ride every other day not to pollute the air. We can also choose products with less packaging, and recycle as much as possible. For instance, supermarkets from which I purchase my requirements now provide reusable bags for shoppers; also, recyclable plastic and paper glasses are available in lots of places nowadays.
In conclusion, both national governments and individuals must play their part in taking care of the environment through reusing and avoiding unnecessary plane trips.
Analysis
A. Task response:
1. This essay has covered all parts of the given topic most probably because the candidate has spent enough time on comprehending the topic before he/she started to write.
2. The candidate has stated his own opinion definitely regarding the topic.
3. The central paragraphs of the essay have been supported with a range of techniques such as examples
4. This candidate has applied 270 words, which is good enough.
B. Coherence & cohesion:
1. The candidate has managed to express his/her position clearly and successfully because of applying correct & appropriate linkers like although, which, as, but, …
۲٫ This piece of writing is both coherent (ideas have been arranged logically) & cohesive.
C. Grammar:
1. This candidate has used a wide range of structures including compound and complex sentences, …; more importantly, they are correct which mean the candidate has shown an excellent command of English structures by making mistakes in neither basic ones nor advanced ones .
2. The candidate has paid special attention to punctuation.
D. Vocabulary:
1. This candidate has used a wide range of appropriate & different words whose collocations are correct, for instance emission, carpool, contaminating, devastating, renewable, …
۲٫ There is no sign of repetitive words or contractions in the essay; also, spelling and capitalization have been taken care of flawlessly.
Examiner’s final comment:
Totally, this essay seems good enough to be worthy of IELTS Band 7 because of the above-mentioned plus points.
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