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    اردیبهشت ۱۴, ۱۳۹۳ نام: حمید ملازاده

    Animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings, unless there is evidence that the animals do not suffer in any way.
    To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

    There is a lot of controversy about using animals for human needs. Animal rights activists are trying to stop all modern and traditional activities, which involve killing animals or cause their suffering. Traditionalists are trying to convince the community that using living creatures for men’s needs is natural and cannot be avoided in everyday life.

    Activists, who defend animal rights, are telling the world that people should not use animals in any way. Moreover, they say that animals should have exactly the same rights as humans do. The reason is that people and animals are both living creatures and there shouldn’t be any difference in treating them. So called extreme vegans are refusing to eat any food of animal origin, even milk or honey. They are trying to persuade people to do the same using as an argument that killing animals and keeping them in captivity cause their suffering and not civilized.

    Traditionalists disagree with the statement that human should stop killing animals or using them to fulfill their needs. From the very beginning of human civilization there has been a tradition and vital need to use animals as a food and their parts in traditional crafts. Without proteins and vitamins of animal origin human body wouldn’t receive all nutrients it needs. Besides, testing some medicines on animals already helped to fight many diseases people suffered from.

    I think, people have the moral right to use animals to their benefit, to some extent. I am sure, we should not make them suffer and die for our fun. Although using animals for food is natural for humans as predators, as civilized city dwellers we should make sure to use only humane ways of treating them.

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    Task response

    the essay is not off-topic

    the writer has stated his opinion concerning the given topic

    the central paragraphs are well-supported

    the writer has applied minimum 250 words

    Coherence and cohesion

    the message is clear

    the writer has applied linking words, cohesive devices, pronouns and transitions appropriately

    Vocabulary

    The writer has used a range of related words to the topic with appropriate collocations

    Grammar

    The writer has used a wide range of structure correctly

    Band Score: 7.5

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    فروردین ۱۹, ۱۳۹۳ نام: حمید ملازاده

    In recent years, people watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this? Should the government give financial support to local cinema to produce local films?

    It is unquestionably the case that there is a growing trend for people to watch foreign films in preference to films made in their home country. In this essay, I will discuss why this is the case and why I believe national governments ought to support home grown cinema financially.

    Perhaps the principal reason for the popularity of foreign made films is the globalization of culture in the internet age. In the past, children growing up only had access to the culture and traditions of their own country and so preferred to watch films about their own land. Now in the era of YouTube, young people grow up with easy access to an international culture; as a result, when they go to the cinema, they expect to see films that reflect that international culture and for them a Hollywood blockbuster is much “cooler” than a serious film in their own language.

    A second reason why internationally produced films tend to dominate the domestic market is financial. The two great centers of world cinema, Bollywood and Hollywood, have studios with budgets of billions of dollars which can make films with exciting special effects and high production values. In contrast, locally produced films which often have much smaller budgets are therefore less attractive to the mass market.

    Personally, I believe that this globalization of culture is not entirely positive and governments should take action to promote local films. If countries had their own film industries which could compete with the international studios, this would not only help preserve national culture, but also create more choices for the public as global films offer little variety.

    In conclusion, the main reasons for the expansion of international films are a new globalized world culture caused by the internet and the financial power of a few film studios in Hollywood and Bollywood. We would have more choices if the governments subsidized local films.

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    Task response

    the essay is not off-topic

    the writer has stated his opinion concerning the given topic

    the central paragraphs are well-supported

    the writer has applied minimum 250 words

    Coherence and cohesion

    the message is clear

    the writer has applied linking words, cohesive devices, pronouns and transitions appropriately

    Grammar

    The writer has used a range of related words to the topic with appropriate collocations

    Vocabulary

    The writer has used a wide range of structures correctly

                                                                                                                                                Band Score: 7.5

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    فروردین ۱۵, ۱۳۹۳ نام: حمید ملازاده

    In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    Nowadays, many children involved in different types of jobs to have some kind of financial assurance for themselves. However, whether this is good for their development and personality is a controversial issue. I personally believe that paid works is harmful for children for several reasons.

    It is said that children gain valuable experience in the work place. This may be true. However, I would argue that children are mainly employed in jobs that require manual work and are poorly paid. The recent statistics reveal the common tasks that children are assigned to, are washing dishes, mopping floors or serving food in restaurants. Meanwhile, these kinds of jobs actually do not provide children with necessary and useful skills to apply in their future carrier.

    On the other hand defenders of child labour argues that it is an effective method of learning. The point is children should be able to apply knowledge taught to them in a real life working environment. Although this is undoubtedly true, it also means that children may neglect the classroom study and even fail the class. The worst thing is yet to come. They may become so preoccupied with the benefits ahead of them such as small salary that they may leave school.

    In my personal point of view it helps them to build responsibility in the family. They will understand how difficult it is to earn money and therefore have compassion for their parents. This is true to a certain extent, but may have a totally adverse effect on children. As children can make money at an early age, they would feel that it is appropriate to spend it on luxury things.

    In conclusion, I think that parents should take measures to restrict their child from work, otherwise it would have negative consequences to their future.

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    Task response

    the essay is not off-topic

    the writer has stated his opinion concerning the given topic

    the central paragraphs are well-supported

    the writer has applied minimum 250 words

    Coherence and cohesion

    the message is clear

    the writer has applied linking words, cohesive devices, pronouns and transitions appropriately

    Grammar

    The writer has used a range of related words to the topic with appropriate collocations

    Vocabulary

    The writer has used a wide range of structures correctly

     Band Score : 7.5